問題詳情:
假設你是紅星中學高三(1)班班長李華。居家學習期間,你們班開展了一次以“自律”爲主題的調研活動。請根據以下四幅圖的先後順序,寫一篇英文稿件,給你們學校英文網站投稿,記述你在本次活動中發現問題並解決問題的過程。
注意:詞數不少於60。
提示詞:自律 self-discipline
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【回答】
One possible version:
While studying at home, I surveyed my class on “self-discipline”. The findings worried me a lot.
To solve the problem, I asked my parents for help, and they offered some practical advice. Then I held an online discussion with my classmates on how to well discipline ourselves. After that, we all knew better what to do.
Three months later, I did a second survey, which showed great improvements in self-discipline. I phoned my teacher about it, and we both felt very pleased.
【分析】
本篇書面表達屬於應用文。這是一篇圖畫作文,要求考生按以下四幅圖的先後順序,就你開展“自律”調研活動中發現問題並解決問題的過程寫一篇英文稿件,向學校英文網站投稿。
【詳解】
第一步:審題
體裁:應用文
時態:根據提示,時態應爲一般過去時
人稱:第一人稱爲主
結構:總分法
總分法指把主題句作爲總說,把支援句作爲分說,並以這種方式安排所寫內容。
要求:1. 表明寫作主題——“自律”
2. 根據圖片描寫事件過程:
第一幅圖片描寫自己對“自律”調研結果很擔憂;
第二幅圖片描寫自己向父母求助解決方法/建議;
第三幅圖片描寫自己和同學們在網上討論如何自律;
第四幅圖片描寫三個月後,大家自律能力有了很大提高,我和老師很高興。
第二步:列提綱 (重點詞組)
ask sb. for help;practical advice;an online discussion;do a second survey
第三步:連詞成句
1. I asked my parents for help, and they offered some practical advice.
2. Then I held an online discussion with my classmates on how to well discipline ourselves.
3. I did a second survey, which showed great improvements in self-discipline.
(根據提示及關鍵詞(組)進行遣詞造句,注意主謂一致和時態問題。)
第四步:連句成篇(銜接詞)
1.表文章結構順序:First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At last, Last but not least
2.表並列補充關係:What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition, As well as, not only…but (also), including, also
3.錶轉折對比關係:However, On the contrary, but, Although + clause (從句), In spite of + n/doing, On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that…
4.表因果關係:Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result
5表換一種方式表達:In other words, that is to say,
6.表進行舉例說明:For example; For instance; such as + n/doing
7.表陳述事實:In fact, frankly speaking
8.表選擇:either…or…,or
連句成文,注意使用恰當的連詞進行句子之間的銜接與過渡,書寫一定要規範清晰。
第五步:潤*修改
【點睛】
範文內容完整,結構嚴謹,要點全面,語言規範,語篇連貫,詞數適當,上下文意思連貫,符合邏輯關係。作者在範文中使用了主從複合句,如which showed great improvements in self-discipline這句話中用了which引導的非限制*定語從句;使用了非常好的短語,如ask sb. for help,an online discussion,do a second survey等,爲文章增*不少。全文中沒有*式英語的句式,顯示了很高的駕馭英語的能力。另外,文章思路清晰、層次分明,上下句轉換自然,爲文章增*添*。
知識點:學校生活
題型:作文