問題詳情：
題目②
自律，即自我約束，是自我提升的一種途徑，有助於我們成長，促使我們不斷前行。
某英文網站正在開展以“自律”為主題的徵文活動。假如你是李華，請用英語寫一篇短文投稿，談談為了增強自律意識，你做過什麼，以及這樣做給你帶來的好處。
提示詞語: self-disciplined(自律的)，plan，goal，habit，improve
提示問題: What did you do to be self-disciplined?
What benefits have you got from doing so?
Self-discipline plays an important role in our life .
【回答】
Self-discipline plays an important role in our life. To be honest, I am a person who is self-disciplined. I used to follow all kinds of rules and hand in the tasks appointed on time at school. And I could not only respected all my teachers but also get on well with my classmates. At home, I was able to balance housework and homework. I usually made a plan in advance to make it easier to achieve my goal. After finishing all the task, I developed the habit of going to bed early and going to bed early. In the society，I spared no effort to improve myself all the time.
In a word. I have benefited a lot from being self-discipline. First of all, I have had many good habits, which makes my life easier and more regular. Secondly, my life and my study have been to high efficiency so that a lot of time has been saved. Thirdly, being self-disciplined has prepared me for a better and brighter future. In the future, I will continue to be a self-disciplined person.
【解析】
這篇作文要求我們以李華的身份，用英語寫一篇短文給某網站投稿，談談為了增強自律意識，你做過什麼，以及這樣做給你帶來的好處。根據題目中給出的問題可知，短文應包括以下內容：首先談一談為了增強自律意識，你做過什麼？然後談談這樣做給你帶來的好處。第一個內容應主要使用一般過去時；第二個內容應主要使用現在完成時。注意謂語動詞的正確形式。題目中並沒有規定具體的寫作內容，學生們應聯繫自己的實際生活，展開合理的想象，將這些內容補充完整後，用正確的英語表達出來，這是寫作中的一個難點。寫作時應注意：首先注意內容的完整、充實，學生們可以結合自己的實際生活，寫一寫自己平時的做法。注意敍述應有層次、有條理。其次應注意英語的表達問題，英語句式的結構與漢語是不同的，因此不能根據漢語思維逐詞翻譯，應該從句式的整體考慮，先確定主幹結構，然後添加修飾成分。為提升作文檔次，應注意使用一些高級詞彙、短語以及複合句、非謂語動詞等複雜結構。同時語句之間使用恰當的連接成分，使文意上下連貫，表達流暢。
【點睛】
這是一篇優秀的作文，短文作者根據題目要求，介紹了自己第自律的認識，結合自己的實際談論了自律的好處。短文有以下幾個優點：首先文章內容完整、充實，短文主要分兩段：第一段中作者介紹了自己在家裏、在學校以及在社會上是如何遵守規則，進行自我約束的。這一段的內容敍述很有條理，從at school, At home, In the society三個方面進行介紹。第二段中作者主要闡述了自律給自己帶來的好處，使用了Firstly, Secondly, Thirdly，從三個方面進行介紹。其次短文中使用了正確的時態和人稱，謂語動詞形式準確，語法規範，句式結構文章，且使用了較高級的詞彙和複雜句式，提升了作文檔次，展現了作者紮實的寫作功底。文章中較好的句型有：I used to follow all kinds of rules and hand in the tasks appointed on time at school.、I usually made a plan in advance to make it easier to achieve my goal.、First of all，I have had many good habits，which makes my life easier and more regular.、Thirdly, being self-disciplined has prepared me for a better and brighter future.等等。
知識點：個人情況
題型：作文
